What do I think is better, music or sport?
By James
Sport:
Well I think sport is super cool because anyone can do it.
It can help people with some body problems and missing limbs, if you want to lose some weight running is the best thing for it and most sports involve running.
For Example:
You are missing some body parts and you want to become stronger but you think it will be hard for you, swimming will help a lot.
Music:
Well I think that music is super important and cool for humility.
The thing that you can do with music is dance to it, play it and it sounds so nice.
Some of the coolest songs are so hard to play.
If you want to play a instrument it won’t be easy but it will be worth it.
Music can help with your finger and eye coordination.
Anyone can play music.
What do I think is better?
I don’t no actually I say I like them both the same because, I love the electric guitar and music but, I love sports too because, they and good for keeping fit. So I like both.
By James
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ReplyDeleteKia Ora James, you are beginning to organize your ideas into different paragraphs by separating them into sports and music. Instead of starting a new line with each sentence, you can write the sentences directly after another. Remember to write an introduction to talk a little bit more about sports and music - e.g. types of sport/ music. I found it interesting how you said that music builds humility. What was your thinking behind that?
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